“Screen play”
EXT: airport – night
It was a stormy night, dark and raining. And Lisa plane had landed 9.54pm. She had pick up her luggage and check out. Once she was out with her luggage she went to go book a taxi, and was told that is will take 10mins, so Lisa took a sit.
Lisa phone rings
LISA#1: Hello.
LISAS FRIEND#3: Hey! How were you flight
LISA#1: Great! I had a really wonderful time.
Taxi#2: Madame, Madame
LISA#1: Stacey, I will call u later my taxi’s here
LISA FRIEND#3: ok. Bye.
The phone cuts
Lisa gets up with her luggage toward the taxi
LISA#1: yes, yes
Taxi#2: Are you Lisa grey
this is my second attemp at the script. i made this on word
Well done!
ReplyDeleteYou have used the correct typeface for a script. You have written character names in CAPITALS - make sure all references to the characters are in capitals. Also, be sure to give everyone a proper name, not just Friend#1 etc.
Dialogue should be indented once (press the TAB key) and character names should be indented TWICE. This will make it easier to see where the dialogue is. Don't CENTRE the text as it makes it hard for the reader to find their way back to the start of the next line.
Sluglines (locations) should be entirely in capitals.
It is fine to write in slang as that is how people speak, but don't use slang spelling such as "u" instead of "you"
In your introduction SHOW us what is happening, not talk about it. What do we see on screen that shows us that her plane arrived at 9.45? Do we see a TV screen that says "Arrivals...Paris 9.45 Landed"? How do we know that she has to wait 10 minutes for a cab? SHOW US not tell us!!
So far this is at a pass level, but with these improvements it will easily be up to a distinction level.